Some people say that Japan should improve relations with other Asian nations such as South Korea, North Korea, and China. However, I think that is not the Japanese government’s priority. Rather, our nation’s priority should be the relationship with the U.S. and so on.
First, it is impossible to have good relationships with non-democratic countries. One of communist party’s main purposes is to destroy capitalism. China and North Korea are not only communist countries but also countries dominated by one political group or a dictator. Their animosity toward Japan is caused by the governments as Communists” not people’s decision. It is not worth improving relationships with them unless their government’s diplomatic policy is made by their citizens.
Second, it is just a waste of time to try to alleviate tension between Japan and South Korea. Japan has been supporting South Korea for a long time to maintain a good relationship with them. However, recent tension is caused by South Korea’s acts. To make relationships normal, Japan should not do anything for South Korea.
To concede, I disagree with the idea of improving relations with Asian countries.
【添削結果】 Some people say that Japan should improve relations with other Asian nations (A)including/such as South Korea, North Korea, and China. However, I (B_)don’t believe that is/think that is not(_B) the Japanese government’s priority. Rather, our nation’s priority should be the relationship with the U.S. and (C)others/so on.
First, it is (D)hardly possible/unrealistic/not feasible/impossible to have good relationships with non-democratic countries. One of (E)the communist party’s main purposes is to destroy capitalism. China and North Korea are not only communist countries but also countries(F)controlled/dominated by one political group or a dictator. Their animosity toward Japan is caused by the governments as (G)”Communists” (H), not people’s decision. It is not worth (I)establishing better/improving relationships with them unless their government’s diplomatic policy is made by their citizens.
Second, it is just a waste of time to try to (J)ease/loosen/decrease/relieve/alleviate (K)the tension between Japan and South Korea. Japan has been supporting South Korea for a long time to maintain a good relationship with them. However, recent tension is (L)triggered/caused by South Korea’s acts. To (M_)normalize the relationships/make the relationships normal(_M), Japan should not do anything for South Korea.
(N)For these reasons above/To concede, I disagree with the idea of improving relations with Asian countries.
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